Wednesday, June 22, 2011

what do you think of my lyrics?

It's a rcok song and kind of ballad like. Please rate the song out f
ten and be honest and specific, please don't give a three word
criticism like "this song sucks," thats not helping anyone.
Thanks

The song is called "all alone"

Verse 1: Oh my fair maiden, where are you today
Your judgement time has come
Called by the conduit of Satan himself
He's ready to have some fun

Chorus: all alone he wanders and
Back peddles through tomes of the damned
Waiting for one to arise, and come back to life
So one day he may have her hand

Verse 2: Lurking in shadows, creeping and creaking
I haunt the man who tries, a ghost a whisper
A faint little hiss and the man drops down and dies
A requiem in his memory, we sing below
For the downtrodden men cut down in their prime
We know that it wasn't his time

Chorus: all alone he wanders and
Back peddles through tomes of the damned
Waiting for one to arise, and come back to life
So one day he may have her hand

Bridge: Screeching and petrified, hurt cuz' his hope has died
He decides to leave
And as he walks out of the cemetery, the hand begins to heave (yell)
THE GROUND!
His soul is lost, he lost himself, in crazy paranoia dreams
Now there's nothing left inside to find, he changed his mind
The girl must me down there for good.
btw in the chorus it should say "tombs" not "tomes"

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